The Child is Maladroit by Radrook: Reviews Included

Maladroit: by Radrook

December 29, 2017 Poetry: Dramatic, Humor 4 comments (3 reviews)



The child is maladroit.

as clearly can be seen.

There are too many precious things.

upon which he might lean.



Or he might slip and smack his head

against a glass display.

Please leave him home until he’s grown

or he will ruin our day.



Remember once that just by chance

he broke Don Cuervo’s toe?

When he swung that baseball bat

and suddenly let go?



and hit Don Cuervo who was sitting

in the front-row seat?

And how Don Cuervo howled and cursed

and almost seemed to bleat?



Remember how he fell one day

and killed a suckling pig

when he was just about to taste

a ripening luscious fig?



and lost his footing on a rock

and toppled from his perch?

and landed on the piglet’s back

and caused the sow to dirge?



Or when he lugged a sharpened stick

pretending he could march.

as if he held a rifle

and he skewered Mrs Marge?



And how she now is forced to wear

a gaudy plastic eye?

Please leave him here. He’s maladroit.

Or someone might just die.



www.thefreedictionary.com/maladroit
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ZeldaIsSheik wrote a review...


Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.

I like how you used the word "maladroit" for this, as it not only brings out your intelligence once again, but it is much better than simply saying that the child is ineffective or clumsy. I really liked the examples, although I found a lot of them to be a little unlikely to occur in real life, regardless of ow maladroit this child is.

I guess you could say my two kittens are maladroit. I think they knock things over on purpose. They must find it funny. Speaking of humor, I didn't find this very funny, but that's just my taste. I can definitely see how this could be funny. I definitely liked this poem overall.

That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!

~ZeldaIsShiek




Radrook says...

Thanks for the review and encouraging words. Very much appreciate it Zelda.



ZeldaIsSheik says...

Any time.

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LadyOkra says...


I shouldn't be cackling like a crazed cuckoo but here I am, doing just that. I feel rather sorry for Mrs. Marge and am ashamed at myself for laughing so much, but really it is so much fun.


And how Don Cuervo howled and cursed
and almost seemed to bleat?


Humor, top-notch my friend.

I really enjoy your rhyming skills. Good job. Keep writing.

Cheers!



Radrook says...

Thanks for reading and the review. Clumsy people can wreak havoc-that's for sure. Funny sometimes though. LOL!

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CreativelyWritten wrote a review...


I thought this poem was really cute! It also helps that I love rhyming poetry. I feel that in some lines the rhythm isn't matching. Particularly in the first stanza. The third line seems almost too long to flow into the fourth. But alas I know rhyming and making sense can be hard so I don't fault you. That's really the only problem I see is the flow in some spots. Otherwise, it's perfect and funny and I think it was really smart to include the url at the end. I for one didn't know the word maladroit.


Radrook says...

Thanks for the review and advice. Glad you found it humorously entertaining. I will see if I can make it flow better.

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thetwofridas wrote a review...


Hi! This really is a great poem. It's very unique! Just a few things:

The last line of the second stanza, 'and sudden[ly] let it go.'

The last line of the last stanza, 'Or else some[body] might die.' I just think it sounds better.

Also, the rhyming can feel a bit forced at times but that's just my opinion. Thank you for sharing! Keep it up




Radrook says...

Thanks for the review the advice and encouragement.