eat the moon by Anamel: Posted with Author's Permission
Apr 4, 2020 10:13:29 GMT -5
Post by Radrook Admin on Apr 4, 2020 10:13:29 GMT -5
eat the moon by Anamel
eat the moon
if i pull the moon apart in my hands
would its woven seams unravel and spill
lurid light, like the yolk of a swan’s egg,
crack and baptize my fingers in holy light?
or, perhaps, it would be delicious and hallowed,
as remnants of sweetened rice flour
coat my grit teeth and sallow face--
and the glass of its unpolished shell
slice my wretched heart apart.
eat the moon
if i pull the moon apart in my hands
would its woven seams unravel and spill
lurid light, like the yolk of a swan’s egg,
crack and baptize my fingers in holy light?
or, perhaps, it would be delicious and hallowed,
as remnants of sweetened rice flour
coat my grit teeth and sallow face--
and the glass of its unpolished shell
slice my wretched heart apart.
Review
Very nice poem, full of very vivid symbolic imagery. I say symbolic because In poetry one has to take the symbolic meaning of things into serious consideration.-especially when the symbols don’t make any literal sense.
Poetry taken literally, would in many cases result n ridiculous message. For example, we cannot literally eat a moon. However, we can symbolically eat, or try to consume mentally whatever it is that the moon traditionally represents. What does the moon represent?
Well, right off the bat, we know that the moon is a symbol of Romance.
timesofindia.indiatimes.com/blo ... -romantic/
So this the poet can be understood as telling us that he is wondering how his romantic hopes would pan out if he were to examine them carefully or eat the moon via such a meticulous examination. Would they confirm his romantic expectations. Or would his romantic notions prove extremely disappointing and even repulsive. That is the way I choose to understand poem.
Suggestion
The word “grit” made me stop and ponder. Perhaps “gritted” is better.
pasttenses.com/grit-past-tense
. The eater of the moon is gritting his teeth in determination as he ponders the meaning of his illusions. No, I do not believe that the author is intending to tell us that the eater of the moon literally has grit in his teeth.
Link to Poem
and other reviews
www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Anamel/eat-the-moon-145322?c=686278#c68627
and other reviews
www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/Anamel/eat-the-moon-145322?c=686278#c68627