Review of poem: Love by queenofscience
Mar 31, 2020 22:41:49 GMT -5
Post by Radrook Admin on Mar 31, 2020 22:41:49 GMT -5
LINK To Poem Love: by queenofscience
Thanks for sharing this poem about a girl who feels that she has too many flaws.
When I first came across the word asexual” I momentarily imagined an Amoeba which procreate via nuclear cellular fission or splitting in half. Thought it was going into the sci fi fantasy area.
Then I realized that it was in reference to a normal human being who describes her self as being sick. Since no specifics are provided I could not imagine exactly what the defects are. So what I could garner from the poem is that she sees flaws in herself that she considers are a serious obstacle in finding a mate.
Suggestions:
Too many spelling mistakes:
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desison
[decision]
Eventhough
[Even though]
Vociakl cords
[Vocal Cords]
qualites
[qualities]
Who will love a Christin/Jewish girl? ( haritage-wise).
[Who will love a Christian/Jewish girl? ( heritage-wise).]
integerty
[integrity]
gental,
[gentle]
The expression that the speaker will marry a male and bno a female is perhaps indicative that the speaker might be a hemophrodite?
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hermaphrodite
Such a condition is indeed very stressful and it is admirable that people can successfully deal with such obstacles successfully.
Very interesting poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
When I first came across the word asexual” I momentarily imagined an Amoeba which procreate via nuclear cellular fission or splitting in half. Thought it was going into the sci fi fantasy area.
Then I realized that it was in reference to a normal human being who describes her self as being sick. Since no specifics are provided I could not imagine exactly what the defects are. So what I could garner from the poem is that she sees flaws in herself that she considers are a serious obstacle in finding a mate.
Suggestions:
Too many spelling mistakes:
Please note that with today’s spell-checkers available at a mere click spelling mistakes are inexcusable. It conveys a lack of caring about what has been written. Otherwise, why not take the time? So if indeed you want to be taken seriously as a writer, the please always remember to pass your composition through a spell-checker. Misspelled words are indicate by a red line that appears below them. They will appear both on your word processor and here on this web-site.
desison
[decision]
Eventhough
[Even though]
Vociakl cords
[Vocal Cords]
qualites
[qualities]
Who will love a Christin/Jewish girl? ( haritage-wise).
[Who will love a Christian/Jewish girl? ( heritage-wise).]
integerty
[integrity]
gental,
[gentle]
The expression that the speaker will marry a male and bno a female is perhaps indicative that the speaker might be a hemophrodite?
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hermaphrodite
Such a condition is indeed very stressful and it is admirable that people can successfully deal with such obstacles successfully.
Very interesting poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work.