Post by Radrook Admin on Mar 26, 2020 3:22:38 GMT -5
The Ordeal: Flash Fiction
by Radrook
Eyes agape and minds benumbed, we plunge amidst screams and the thundering of metal-on-metal beneath our feet. Knuckles white, we grimace and struggle to hold on. The once placid scenery, the ocean, the beach, the white, billowing clouds which had adorned our sky and fascinated us, no longer matter. They have ceased to exist, and are now a distant memory from another reality which no longer holds meaning.
Gravitational force, centrifugal, angular momentum, proclaim their rule, and we are merely appendages waiting to succumb. Those who lack teeth grind their gums, and those who have them, grind them into powder. Believers in God pray for his help, begging fervently to be spared. Atheists just hold on. The next turn could prove the last. The next vertical plunge, our final scream, before everything fades into blackness, and the roller-coaster ride finally stops.
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flash_fiction
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123pinkrose wrote a review...
I really liked it. It is short but it is still packed with detail. It perfectly captures the end of the world. One thing I noticed is that the final sentence is missing a verb but just add "is" after plunge will fix that. But other than that I can not think of much I could critique. I think it is really good.
I also have never heard of flash fiction before but I loved this so I may check some more of these out.
Radrook says...
Thanks for the review. As you can see, Flash fiction can be very brief. The top limit is usually approx 1000 words. I appreciate your advice. Thanks for the help.
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manilla says...
I have no words for this. Seriously.
But the symbolism game in this flash fiction piece is very strong, that I can say.
Radrook says...
Thanks for the review and encouragement. Much Appreciated.