Post by Radrook Admin on Mar 26, 2020 13:18:23 GMT -5
Adam Recalls: by Radrook Reviews Included
Moonlight adorns us in this garden of white roses.
Holding hands, we contemplate the wind
sweeping through the treetop canopy,
as if a rustling whisper from the breath of God.
We met here once long ago
when the glow of youth still graced our cheeks.
We speak of it often now,
About the magic of our first kiss.
About how bold I was and
how shy you were, and still are.
About how the selfsame wind hushed through Eden's trees,
whispering our destiny, and we understood,
and were entranced by one another,
and by the fruit you held in your hand.
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Radrook says...
Thanks for the review and encouraging words. Very much appreciated. Please note that the glow of youth no longer graces their cheeks. Which means that they are old and have suffered the consequences of the fall. I added white flowers to the location because white flowers are usually the ones used at funerals. So the location itself had undergone a drastic change. Nevertheless your comments have focused on a possible flaw in the narrative that might mislead or confuse the reader and I will definitely give it my full consideration to see how it can be avoided. Thanks for the help